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B'ley of Bronze Vereigth [RFR][LFI][Adpt]

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B'ley of Bronze Vereigth [RFR][LFI][Adpt]

B'ley
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BASICS

NAME: B'ley
GENDER: Nonbinary
PRONOUNS: They/Them/Theirs
ORIENTATION: Bisexual Demiromantic

BIRTHDATE: Winter 2745
AGE: 27 as of 2772
LOCATION: Fort Weyr
OCCUPATION: Dragonrider
WING: Midnight Wing

APPEARANCE
EYES: Cornflower blue
HAIR: Wheat-blonde and a bit past the shoulders
HEIGHT AND BUILD: 6'3", broad shoulders, narrow hips

FULL APPEARANCE: B'ley is ... fairly androgynous in appearance, with sharp features that seem almost elfen in aspect. They're tall, though not shockingly so, and muscular in the way of someone who takes pride in their musculature; they bind their breasts to give them a more masculine appearance, though they don't seem overly fussed about presenting as male. They move with a slight swagger to their gait, though those who are aware of it might recognize this as an attempt to mask a a limp.

B'ley has a fair complexion, their eyes a pretty pale blue, their hair the color of ripe wheat fields, though they don't seem all that interested in doing more than brushing it and tying it back in a thong. They aren't particularly good at figuring out how to attire themselves, seeming far more comfortable in their riding gear than in their Gather Day best, which looks a bit ill-fitting and worn, the relic of an friend's pity cast-offs that they've stuck with since graduating Weyrlinghood. It's clear that they've grown a bit broader and taller since then.

At least their every day non-riding gear is a bit better; it fits without showing their ankles, anyway. That's something.

PERSONALITY
PERSONALITY: B'ley has traditionally been a quieter member of the Weyr, unwilling to stir the pot unless they're certain their addition is useful. Their time in the Weyr before Impressing, with the High Reaches attack and Fort Hold withholding tithes, left a deep mark on their psyche. It was beyond horrifying, and the loneliness and isolation of losing easy access to their family resulted in B'ley no longer having contact with them.

After all, once they'd Impressed... and then graduated Weyrling class... it just seemed -- like they'd be boasting if they went back? It felt wrong, disloyal, somehow, and Vereigth wasn't terribly interested in wallowing in Their rider's humble origins. You are Ours now, Vereigth informed them in no uncertain terms. Our Rider's family is the Weyr now, is us, not some foolishly named kitchen servants. It was... a well-intentioned move from the Bronze, who'd decided that his Rider's family had not done nearly as much for them as they had for their family, and thus they were not worthy.

With their past reluctantly set behind them, B'ley is now focused on doing everything in their power to make Fort the kind of Weyr it needed to be in order to be safe from the ravages of whatever might come, be it Thread or dragon's flame or foolish Lord Holders. After ten years with Vereigth, they're ready to do more, though the Bronze still has a habit of overriding them that could prove dangerous.

HISTORY
FAMILY: Mother worked in the kitchens at Fort Hold, father is unknown; five half-siblings, all younger
- Hyssop (-3 years, asthmatic)
- Rye (-7 years)
- Turnip (-9 years)
SIGNIFICANT OTHER: None
BIRTHPLACE: Fort Hold

HISTORY: Barley was born to the mighty and bustling Fort Hold, the child of a kitchen maid who never wed the father, nor the fathers of any of Barley's half-siblings; her indiscretions were viewed with contempt, her children raised with the other lowest ranking Hold children.

Their childhood wasn't great, but it could have been worse. They grew tight-knit bonds with some of the other Hold children, forming a roaming group of 'hungry, wherry-brained younglings', as an irritable Trader once called them. Being one the larger children for their age, they acted as a de facto protector of not only their own siblings, but of other younger, smaller children too, popular amongst their lowborn peers, if not among the Blooded children. They were an adequate but not particularly gifted student, far more interested in learning hands-on than repeating the Harper's songs or scratching letters in wax tablets.

They ended up working in the kitchens with their mother, their vocation rather taken for granted as inevitable given their mother's status. The ancient, enormous Hold had begun to feel like an impossible prison by the time they turned sixteen, and they were considering trying to find someone, anyone, to sponsor them as a Runner apprentice when the unexpected occurred: they were Searched by an elderly Whitepair, visiting Fort on a leisure call.

Neither the Rider nor Barley anticipated that they would be Searched, but the dragon was insistent, and for Barley, as reluctant as they were to leave their siblings and mother behind, was as eager as they were wary of the opportunity.

They Stood for two Hatchings, during which time High Reaches attacked Fort in an unprecedented act of Dragonrider on Dragonrider violence; the experience scarred Barley, the white rider who Searched them one of many who fell to the first attack. By the time the second one rolled around, Barley was one of many Candidates who helped as best they could during and after, and if they'd never shown much of a use at healing, they helped in the kitchens, aware that while it was hardly ostentatious but that it was critically important work nevertheless during times of need.

Ties with Fort became strained, and Barley soon lost all communication with their family, leaving them isolated and missing their siblings, even if Fort Weyr had slowly begun to feel like a place they were needed.

Keahith's maiden clutch was laid shortly after Golre's demise, and when Vereigth came staggering from his enormous shell, his eyes whirling orange with hunger and agitation, Barley didn't bother looking at him after a glance, for a Bronze like that would surely Impress to someone more qualified than a kitchen girl.

Barley was wrong. On multiple counts.

B'ley, square your shoulders; you are Ours now, and we have work to do. The Bronze was upon them before they could even try to dissuade him, those brutal claws gouging a permanent injury across B'ley's left thigh that would leave them with a small but annoying limp.

After that, everything changed.

Weyrling classes were grueling, and the bond between Rider and Dragon was ... strained. Vereigth was an impressive creature, sure to be one of the bigger bronzes, and yet they were dissatisfied with nearly everything about their Bonded. There was an air of superiority from the bronze that B'ley struggled with, and after a great deal of discordance between them... B'ley came to realize that the discomfort had been theirs all along, not Vereigth's.

Once they became who they'd been all along and adopted the neutral pronouns that fit them best, B'ley and Vereigth finally seemed to find a far less strained relationship between them, Vereigth finally satisfied that Theirs was now who they were, not hiding like a frightened runnerbeast. They've spent the last decade growing into their role as a Bronze, as a Fighting pair, and as members of Fort Weyr.
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VEREIGTH
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B'ley, square your shoulders; you are Ours now, and we have work to do.


BASICS

NAME: Vereigth
BIRTHDATE Summer 2762
AGE: 10 as of 2772

APPEARANCE
LENGTH: 55ft
HEIGHT: 13.75ft
WINGSPAN: 82.5ft
COLOR: Bronze
HEX CODE: #3d3305
FULL APPEARANCE: Vereigth is on the large end of bronzes. He's a big, hulking monster of muscle and terror and he knows it. He is large, with strong legs and broad wings. He won't be winning any speed contests anytime soon, but he is a monster to contend with. He is a pretty basic bronze all over, with a bright shine to him. His face has a broad, pale-bronze mask over it, like he is wearing bone on his face to scare others. His front feet are the same coloration, and they fade to a more pale, almost tarnished bronze going up his forelegs like long armor. The same color is on the undersides of his wingsails.

PERSONALITY
PERSONALITY: Vereigth is not a nightmare, but at first glance he can be. He feels ancient and superior, and he feels that his duty is not to rule, but to sweep imperfections off of Pern. Those 'imperfections' only make sense to him, and might range from a green that is "too green" or a mutation color. He has a grudging respect for authority, and he really things that things should just fit into his ideas of perfection and not perfection. He doesn't really know how to deal when something defies his sense of logic, as if he doesn't know how to wrap his head around it, and might lash out with anger or confusion.

To his rider, Vereigth will be distant. It may take him months to really warm up. At his core, he wants his orders and wants to do things right, even if his idea of what's right isn't what everyone else thinks. He will listen to his rider first and foremost, and put their needs before his own, and anything else is distasteful, and decidedly crude, and the mark of a 'lesser dragon'. Vereigth desires to put his rider at the top of power, not to rule Pern, but to keep them safe and ensure that no harm will ever come to them.

VOICE: Vereigth speaks in a heavy, deep male voice. He uses "we" instead of "I", though he does slip up and use "I" now and then, especially in private.
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-Most of what is in B'ley's personality should be in their history, such as how they drifted apart from their family. Their personality should focus more on what they're like now. Please add more description about who B'ley is. Also what exactly does "do more" mean or look like to them? I may have more comments about their personality once it's rewritten.

-Fort Hold is a major, formerly PC location that we ask players to be very careful setting canon about. A lot of PCs will have that as their place of birth and it has a fairly well-defined history on TPA. You make a number of assumptions about Fort Hold in your history that relate to more than just B'ley and associated NPCs: That B'ley's mother would be widely viewed with contempt because of her illegitimate children, that the lowest born children would all have been raised together, that B'ley was popular and the protector of a large number of lowborn children, that B'ley following their mother's profession would have been seen as inevitable. Tamir here is a good example of how to write a history set at a major location, that borders near the plot- note how her history focuses almost exclusively on her and a small number of NPCs, and doesn't talk much on how the hold at large saw her or interacted with her, outside of major plot points like the rebellion. You also do this well with the part of B'ley's history set at Fort Weyr: You focus on B'ley and slot them in places where it's plausible they could have been.

Remember that Fort Hold isn't a cothold. It is large and fairly cosmopolitan as holds go. While it wouldn't be as accepting as a weyr, and some Lord Holders might try to enforce more restrictive morality, illegitimate children wouldn't be unheard of.

I suggest either swapping to a cothold or just making their early history more basic.

-Riders wouldn't be super surprised by their dragon searching someone and wouldn't be hesitant to take them. It's a part of the job.

-B'ley's history focuses almost entirely on their childhood and candidacy. They have been a rider at Fort for a while and there have been a number of important plot events during that time. Please devote some more space to what their life has been like as a rider. At the very least, you need to touch on where they stood during Z'osh' recent takeover.
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