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Shaniya [Adopt] [RFR]

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Shaniya [Adopt] [RFR]

Shaniya of White Raidoth
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BASICS

NAME: Shaniya (Shay)
GENDER: Female
PRONOUNS: she/her/hers
ORIENTATION: Romantic Heterosexual

BIRTHDATE: Fall 2743
AGE: 29 turns as of Early Winter 2772
LOCATION: Fort Weyr

OCCUPATION: Rider
WING: Aurora

APPEARANCE
EYES: Blue-green
HAIR: Blond
HEIGHT AND BUILD: 5'7” Slim build.
PLAY-BY: Indiana Evans
FULL APPEARANCE: Shaniya is a tall, slim blond, with stunning blue-green eyes don't let her build fool you she can pull her own weight right along side the guys when there is work to be done. She typically wears her hair in a long braid down the middle of her back, or up in a bun at the nape of her neck, when she has her helmet on. She likes to wear practical clothing for work, and her more nicer gowns she made are reserved for Gatherings and Hatchings. She looks good in a wide range of colors, and she doesn't really have a favorite color.

She doesn't see any reason in wasting time doing girl things like fixing her hair up every day when just a braid will do. To her its a waste of time when she could be out doing jobs that need done, now as for hatchings and gatherings she will take more care in her looks as she feels she is representing the Weyr at such events.

PERSONALITY
PERSONALITY: Shaniya sees herself more of a tomboy than anything else, being raised with many male relatives, she has learned how to work just as hard as they can she also learned how to fight dirty by using her slim body and their mass against them to the point she can hold her own against their shenanigans, that is unless they ganged up on her, she could mostly take them down one on one at least enough to give her a chance to get away. Shaniya is a very kind person and hard working. She won't slack in any job she is given, she will follow instructions from her Wingleader and the Weyrleaders. Shaynia is very stubborn and bull headed she does not like to be told she is wrong about stuff she knows or how to do something she already has done before. That is unless they can prove where she is wrong and then she will begrudgingly accept where she is wrong and apologies to them.

Though unlike her dragon - white Raidoth- she values the days she can have off to enjoy her little hobbies, such as making her own clothes and simple rugs for her quarters even enjoying listening to the bards play and even sing along or dance when the mood hits her. Shaniya like to spend time with her friends most of them being of the male gender just be sociable in general not that she has many friends to begin with, she just doesn't really know how to female friends for most of the time she is to bold in her actions and words for most of the female taste. In other words she sees herself as just one of the guys.

HISTORY
FAMILY:
Father Tyrell - Journeyman Tanner
Mother Celina - Journeyman Weaver
Bothers 3 older and 3 younger
Many relatives to help out in the family cothold.
SIGNIFICANT OTHER: None at this time
BIRTHPLACE: Small cothold 10 miles outside Peyton hold
HISTORY:Before Shaynia was born her parents set out after a few turns as Journeyman and choosing not be masters in their crafts, set out to form a small cothold of their own with their other family members, where they provided well enough for their families.

Shaniya grew up in a small family cothold, she is the only daughter born of seven children to parents Tyrell and Celina.

As she was growing up her older brothers took it upon themselves to teach her the basics of fighting for her own protection and that being how to fight dirty with no holds bar, in this she didn't have to fight fair only enough so she could get away to safety if need be.

Shaniya's life was a happy one. She grew to love helping her mother whenever her mother needed her help, she would make their clothes, rugs and blankets from furs, and even assisting in some light leather work that her father had tanned himself.

Shaniya was twenty-four Turns when she was out after Threadfall looking for missed thread before it could burrow for they did not have a wherhandler or a whatch wher to help protect the farm land. That was when she was found on Search, much to the surprise and joy of her family. It was a real honor that a dragon, let alone a blue Searchdragon, would land at their little cothold. I wasn't long after that she impressed white Raidoth.

The day Shaniya impressed Raidoth was the first time she saw a chimera hatch as a Bronze-White dragon emerged from its shell. Their bonding was an easy and joyous event.

Before Raidoth's first turn the two of them heard about the rise of Fort Hold's rebellion over Lord Vellaren and banishing all of their wherhandlers from others talking about it. That fall they were caught in the middle of the rift between traditionalists and progressives as it grew ever wider not that she really felt one way or the other with her being new to the Weyr life she just did what she was told and helped her dragon grow up nice and strong.

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RAIDOTH

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BASICS

NAME: Raidoth
BIRTHDATE Early Fall, 2768
AGE: 4 as of winter 2772

APPEARANCE
LENGTH: 28ft
HEIGHT: 7ft
WINGSPAN: 42ft
COLOR: White
HEX CODE: #b7bac0
FULL APPEARANCE: As if he were made to be the antithesis of Joheith, Raidoth is no less than a stunning white. On the larger end, he is lean and narrow, with startlingly broad wings for how slim the rest of him is. He is a pale, moonlight-white all over, with the backs of his wingsails a more slate gray. There are two dark gray "scar-like" markings over his face, one over his right eye and one across the left side of his muzzle. There are thick bands of gray over his shoulders and ankles, with large bands of gray that look not unlike supply packs on his hips. There bands and lightning-like zigzags on his tail. On the insides of his wings are darker gray crack-like marks.

PERSONALITY
PERSONALITY: Married to his work, in the strictest sense. Raidoth has a weyr to protect and he will do it at the expense of his own health. And his sleep. And pretty much everything else. He is a serious dragon, and getting him to relax is a monumental task. He does find small things that he enjoys, usually involving swimming. He does enjoy the rain as well. One would think that he and Joheith have a rivalry, but Raidoth is fairly certain that it would be useless. That doesn't stop him from occasionally thinking that he is the better white.

To his rider, Raidoth is the pinnacle of discipline. He will be endlessly pushing them to be better, and will need to be told and taught that it is fine to have a day or two to just not be going at 100%. He could stand to find something that he enjoys that is not work, because he could work all day and be fine. He means very well, he wants the best for the world. But unlike Joheith, he is a little more likely to lash out at others. The job is most important, why doesn't anyone else get that!

Voice: Vocal and outspoken, Raidoth's voice is deep, like a roll of thunder.
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-The Why Me? should be removed. It doesn't apply to Shaniya and is about Raidoth's original rider

-A general comment on this app: This app seems to generalize a lot about other girls and women. There are plenty of women who aren't stereotypically feminine across Pern. I'm going to quote below the specific lines I'm thinking of, but please keep that in mind in general as you write her.

-"She see any reason in wasting time doing girl things like fixing her hair up every day when just a braid will do"

Not all girls spend a lot of time on their hair. Wearing a braid or keeping their hair short would be pretty common on Pern, where many women do physically demanding jobs (farmwork, smithing, being a dragonrider).

-"Unless they ganged up on her, she could take them down one on one."

It seems unrealistic for a slender, 5'7 women with no training to be able to beat every (probably larger than her) man in her household in a one-on-one fight. Being able to hold her own doesn't mean she'll only win if she's ganged up on. She can hold her own without always winning against larger and stronger opponents.

-"Shaniya like to spend time with her friends most of them being of the male gender just be sociable in general not that she has many friends to begin with, she just doesn't really know how to female friends for most of the time she is to bold in her actions and words for most of the female taste. In other words she sees herself as just one of the guys."

There are plenty of women, at the weyr and elsewhere, who are bold or like being friends with bold people. Shaniya would have met plenty of them, at the weyr if not at her home hold. Her classmates as a weyrling included several women who were hardly soft-spoken or retiring, as does her wing.

-Shaniya needs a flaw.

-"Shaniya was twenty-four Turns when she was out after Threadfall looking for missed burrows that she was found on Search"

Holders are not responsible for finding burrows after Threadfall. The groundcrew of wherhandlers handles that.
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Ok I think I fixed what you wanted and explained more on others but is ready to look again.
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Please re-read the edits I asked for. This edit does not address or insufficiently addresses several points. I am looking for these points to be changed, not further explained. If something just needs further explanation, staff will explicitly say that that's what we're looking for. Requested staff edits are not optional.
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Gymlin of Brown Glacendath
Ieyasu of Brown Ieyask
P'pin of Brown Palath
T'rin of Brown Celeth
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G'er of Garnet Neozeoth
Lily of Garnet Eridieth
N'ell of Garnet Pamith
Relli of Garnet Rellivask and Blue Relsk
Augury of Blue Velveth
Chrysanthe of Blue Bidath
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Sam'in of Blue Salineath
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Elyron of Green Elyrosk
Kiriani of Green Tabesleuth
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Quintar of Green Task
S'atyl of Green Nineveth
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M'ieln of White Hroth
Rhaenys of White Cosmiath
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Di'a of Brown Kasshuth
Dobby of Brown Kersuth
I'lir of Brown Belliorath
Ingrid of Brown Delinarth
Wingleader Myalla of Brown Enarth
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Edda of Blue Katakurth
Jace of Blue Gallath
Jae of Blue Zappath
Sayla of Blue Sacroth
Sha'm of Blue Taarisoth
Tamara of Blue Requeth
Ya'ra of Blue Dymrith
Yvaen of Blue Bolduth
Zhuli of Blue Zhusk and Blue Lisk
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Kip of Green Amizuth
Numann of Green Rannath
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T'ir of Green Blysith
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Ly'nk of Garnet Sakuyath
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Eleanor of Green Elsk
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Mi'wa of Green Ephiith
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