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Candidate Yennefer (RFR)

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    Fri Jan 24, 2020 2:55 am
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Candidate Yennefer (RFR)

Candidate Yennefer (Yen)

"She's tall, y'all.
- Dragon_Dreamer_2018"


BASICS

RETIRE INFO: Adopt both.
NAME: : Yennefer (Yen)
Gender: Female
PRONOUNS: She/Her/Her's
ORIENTATION: Biromantic

BORN: Early Winter, Turn 2752
AGE: 18
LOCATION: High Reaches
OCUPATION: Candidate
WING: N/A

APPEARANCE

EYES: Sapphire Blue
HAIR: Black
HEIGHT AND BUILD: 5'9 Tall, and slender.
FULL APPEARANCE:

Yennifer has striking Sapphire blue eyes, long back hair with a slight wave that rests down to her waist, and a pale complexion. She's 5'9 in height being quite slender, and very tall.

She has sturdy practical clothes consisting of a set of durable leather (Wherrhide) pants, jacket, and boots. Her top is woven from cotton for warmth.


PERSONALITY:

She's quite timid on the exterior though internally it's quite the opposite. Over time she's slowly coming out of her shell. Yen's pretty awkward since she overthinks many situations, and her bluntness comes out of nowhere sometimes.

HISTORY
FAMILY:
Mother: Tissa 43 years of age (Spring, Turn 2727)
Father: Clyde 44 years of age (Autumn, Turn 2726)
Sister: Astrid 15 years of age (Winter, Turn 2755)
Brother: Axel 17 years of age (Summer, Turn 2753)

SIGNIFICANT OTHER: Hasn't found the one yet.
BIRTHPLACE: Outskirts of Fort Hold
HISTORY:
Yen's born on a family-run farm located on the outskirts of Fort Hold. She lives alongside her parents and two siblings. She had a pretty standard childhood, with supportive parents. Her parents would encourage all of their children's aspirations.

Yen would think of herself as nothing special just a small farm girl, though an exciting and thrilling life is what she yearns for. She's left home now and took her farmhouse runner Saber with her, to seek new adventures.

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IbeDragonMyself
 
    Fri Jan 24, 2020 5:05 am
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(RFR) Saber

Saber



BASICS


NAME: Saber
BIRTHDATE Summer, Turn 2766
AGE: 4 as of Summer


APPEARANCE

LENGTH: 7'8 (2.4M)
HEIGHT: 5'9 (1.8M)
COLOUR (COAT): Seal Brown Bay

FULL APPEARANCE:

Strong tall and sturdy build. Beautiful long black hair that flows through the wind, and a slight tinge of a chestnut brown underbelly.
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    Fri Jan 24, 2020 5:51 am
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IC Information
What type of candidate is your character: Dragon

What color/s does your character want?: Garnet


Does your character have any personality preferences or concerns?: Prefers a feisty dragon with plety of attitude.


Does your character have any other preferences or concerns?: Doesn't want a docile dragon.


OOC Information


If your character is a dual candidate IC, do you have a strong preference on whether they Impress dragon or wher?:

What color(s) are you willing for your character to impress to?: Any


Do you have any personality preferences or concerns?: Any


Do you have any other preferences or concerns?: Any


Why do you think these choice/s would be a good fit?: It'll be fun whatever is chosen. XD

Do you have any preferences about the conditions of your character’s impression?: No preferences, any.

Are you alright with your character getting hurt? What injury level is acceptable/what should be avoided?: It's fine if my character is injured, just not a critical injury.


Is there anything you will ABSOLUTELY NOT accept?: Anything is fine.
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Please fix the formatting in this post to conform with other profiles on the site: Namely, unless specifically coded otherwise, the text should be the standard font sized and not bolded. Each section needs to be all in one place instead of scattered around the profile so we can read it more easily.

Also the runner needs to be on a creature template.
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Essa of Bronze Gectusith
Hunter of Bronze Yndesk
Quinn of Bronze-White Louicyth
Wingleader S'bor of Bronze Yugoth
Allag of Brown Babyloth
Daphne of Brown Ogatath
ACM Estelle of Brown Jaehaeryth
Faralyn of Brown Grooth
Gymlin of Brown Glacendath
Ieyasu of Brown Ieyask
P'pin of Brown Palath
T'rin of Brown Celeth
Cole of Garnet Colsk and Blue Colodeosk
G'er of Garnet Neozeoth
Lily of Garnet Eridieth
N'ell of Garnet Pamith
Relli of Garnet Rellivask and Blue Relsk
Augury of Blue Velveth
Chrysanthe of Blue Bidath
Gellera of Blue Virtrath
Korra of Blue Raavath
Kyoshi of Blue Rugrunth
Miryem of Blue Riwenth
Thor of Blue Hinokath
Sam'in of Blue Salineath
Adora of Green Meilith
Elyron of Green Elyrosk
Kiriani of Green Tabesleuth
Wingsecond L'ir of Green Byth
Quintar of Green Task
S'atyl of Green Nineveth
Makoto of White Usakinth
M'ieln of White Hroth
Rhaenys of White Cosmiath
Wingleader Tyrion of White Voluntauth
Actaeon
Mithras
High Reaches
Cynthia of Gold Eliask
Ce'na of Bronze Noath
Hela of Bronze Helsk and Brown Hesk
Azul of Brown Claarisath
Di'a of Brown Kasshuth
Dobby of Brown Kersuth
I'lir of Brown Belliorath
Ingrid of Brown Delinarth
Wingleader Myalla of Brown Enarth
Th'ou of Brown Pavith
Wingsecond D'ark of Garnet Masreith
Squadsecond Tomas of Garnet Tomask and White Tsk
Weyrling Master Camilla of Blue Kamuith
Edda of Blue Katakurth
Jace of Blue Gallath
Jae of Blue Zappath
Sayla of Blue Sacroth
Sha'm of Blue Taarisoth
Tamara of Blue Requeth
Ya'ra of Blue Dymrith
Yvaen of Blue Bolduth
Zhuli of Blue Zhusk and Blue Lisk
Kanon of Green Kibeth
Kip of Green Amizuth
Numann of Green Rannath
Raine of Green Spriggth
Wilred of Green Lresk and Blue Wilrsk
Sokka of Green Wintrath
T'ir of Green Blysith
Riku of White Taissath
Aragon
Pyeta
Semaca Weyr
Arena of Void Oscamith
Alayna of Gold Wyzeth
Al'bus of Bronze Matanuth
Noor of Bronze Nuunieth
Schneizel of Bronze Damocleth
Hermione of Brown Echoneth
K'zon of Brown Rurosuth
Sage of Brown Wisketoth
Shuri of Brown Motath
Varda of Brown Magmeth
Ei of Garnet Eisk
Karlach of Garnet Ussk
Ly'nk of Garnet Sakuyath
Maui of Garnet Mausk and Blue Mask
Uruk of Garnet Georsath
Artemis of Blue Phoebuth
Corleon of Blue Corleosk and White Corlesk
D'vir of Blue Cainhurth
Candidatemaster Naxen of Blue Anitoth
N'aya of Blue Ilouth
Point Rigel of Blue Cygneth
Ariel of Green Kshatriyath
Eleanor of Green Elsk
Eli'us of Green Sallith
Mi'wa of Green Ephiith
Natsuno of Green Minamith
L'ani of Green Haillenarth
Rhea of Green Rheask
Captain Vella of Green Vellask and Magma Vesk
V'rell of Green Peridoth
Wyatt of Green Emilith
Laera of White Tarth
Kowal of White Kowalsk
Pasca of White Judgmeth
R'tan of White Mazath
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Arcane wrote:Please fix the formatting in this post to conform with other profiles on the site: Namely, unless specifically coded otherwise, the text should be the standard font sized and not bolded. Each section needs to be all in one place instead of scattered around the profile so we can read it more easily.

Also the runner needs to be on a creature template.



Hi Arcane,

All the necessary changes have been made to the characters.

Regards,

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Yennefer's history does not fit the setting. If her mother didn't want to raise her child, she could have simply turned her over to the creche instead of leaving her on the streets. Children from the creche are sometimes fostered out but would be unlikely to be adopted out to someone unfit to be a parent.

Healing on Pern is also a formal craft and if Yennefer was going to learn to be a Healer, she would need to apprentice at the crafthall. Healers are not traders and are based out of holds or at the crafthall.

A twelve year old would not be nearly well trained enough to be a Healer and could not acquire these skills on her own. It's a craft that takes a long and intensive education and Healers are highly valued.

Please also tone down the trauma in this backstory. We generally advise sticking to one major childhood tragedy. If you join our discord, staff can help come up with some options for how to rework this history.

My advice would be to change it so her mother surrendered her to the creche and she later became an apprentice at Healer Hall, before being Searched as a candidate. Sometimes simple is best!

Saber's personality also does not fit a runner. Runners do not think like that and if they did, no one would know since they do not talk. Please rewrite it to focus more on his behavior than inner thoughts.
Fort
Essa of Bronze Gectusith
Hunter of Bronze Yndesk
Quinn of Bronze-White Louicyth
Wingleader S'bor of Bronze Yugoth
Allag of Brown Babyloth
Daphne of Brown Ogatath
ACM Estelle of Brown Jaehaeryth
Faralyn of Brown Grooth
Gymlin of Brown Glacendath
Ieyasu of Brown Ieyask
P'pin of Brown Palath
T'rin of Brown Celeth
Cole of Garnet Colsk and Blue Colodeosk
G'er of Garnet Neozeoth
Lily of Garnet Eridieth
N'ell of Garnet Pamith
Relli of Garnet Rellivask and Blue Relsk
Augury of Blue Velveth
Chrysanthe of Blue Bidath
Gellera of Blue Virtrath
Korra of Blue Raavath
Kyoshi of Blue Rugrunth
Miryem of Blue Riwenth
Thor of Blue Hinokath
Sam'in of Blue Salineath
Adora of Green Meilith
Elyron of Green Elyrosk
Kiriani of Green Tabesleuth
Wingsecond L'ir of Green Byth
Quintar of Green Task
S'atyl of Green Nineveth
Makoto of White Usakinth
M'ieln of White Hroth
Rhaenys of White Cosmiath
Wingleader Tyrion of White Voluntauth
Actaeon
Mithras
High Reaches
Cynthia of Gold Eliask
Ce'na of Bronze Noath
Hela of Bronze Helsk and Brown Hesk
Azul of Brown Claarisath
Di'a of Brown Kasshuth
Dobby of Brown Kersuth
I'lir of Brown Belliorath
Ingrid of Brown Delinarth
Wingleader Myalla of Brown Enarth
Th'ou of Brown Pavith
Wingsecond D'ark of Garnet Masreith
Squadsecond Tomas of Garnet Tomask and White Tsk
Weyrling Master Camilla of Blue Kamuith
Edda of Blue Katakurth
Jace of Blue Gallath
Jae of Blue Zappath
Sayla of Blue Sacroth
Sha'm of Blue Taarisoth
Tamara of Blue Requeth
Ya'ra of Blue Dymrith
Yvaen of Blue Bolduth
Zhuli of Blue Zhusk and Blue Lisk
Kanon of Green Kibeth
Kip of Green Amizuth
Numann of Green Rannath
Raine of Green Spriggth
Wilred of Green Lresk and Blue Wilrsk
Sokka of Green Wintrath
T'ir of Green Blysith
Riku of White Taissath
Aragon
Pyeta
Semaca Weyr
Arena of Void Oscamith
Alayna of Gold Wyzeth
Al'bus of Bronze Matanuth
Noor of Bronze Nuunieth
Schneizel of Bronze Damocleth
Hermione of Brown Echoneth
K'zon of Brown Rurosuth
Sage of Brown Wisketoth
Shuri of Brown Motath
Varda of Brown Magmeth
Ei of Garnet Eisk
Karlach of Garnet Ussk
Ly'nk of Garnet Sakuyath
Maui of Garnet Mausk and Blue Mask
Uruk of Garnet Georsath
Artemis of Blue Phoebuth
Corleon of Blue Corleosk and White Corlesk
D'vir of Blue Cainhurth
Candidatemaster Naxen of Blue Anitoth
N'aya of Blue Ilouth
Point Rigel of Blue Cygneth
Ariel of Green Kshatriyath
Eleanor of Green Elsk
Eli'us of Green Sallith
Mi'wa of Green Ephiith
Natsuno of Green Minamith
L'ani of Green Haillenarth
Rhea of Green Rheask
Captain Vella of Green Vellask and Magma Vesk
V'rell of Green Peridoth
Wyatt of Green Emilith
Laera of White Tarth
Kowal of White Kowalsk
Pasca of White Judgmeth
R'tan of White Mazath
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-Yennefer's personality needs some fleshing out. It must have at least five traits, one of which is negative. It's also a little too general right now. What does she like? Why does she want to be a rider? What scares her?

It doesn't need to be an essay but especially as she's a candidate, it should have enough detail for Woky to figure out a good match. Here is a recent example of what is a good amount of length and detail.

-Her history is also a little too bare-bones. What were her childhood dreams? What kind of excitement was she looking for? Did she always want to be a rider?

-Because threadfall makes travel dangerous, people don't usually leave their holds with no definitive destination or purpose. I suggest just having her Searched and brought to the weyr.

-If she is from the Fort area originally, how did she end up at High Reaches?
Fort
Essa of Bronze Gectusith
Hunter of Bronze Yndesk
Quinn of Bronze-White Louicyth
Wingleader S'bor of Bronze Yugoth
Allag of Brown Babyloth
Daphne of Brown Ogatath
ACM Estelle of Brown Jaehaeryth
Faralyn of Brown Grooth
Gymlin of Brown Glacendath
Ieyasu of Brown Ieyask
P'pin of Brown Palath
T'rin of Brown Celeth
Cole of Garnet Colsk and Blue Colodeosk
G'er of Garnet Neozeoth
Lily of Garnet Eridieth
N'ell of Garnet Pamith
Relli of Garnet Rellivask and Blue Relsk
Augury of Blue Velveth
Chrysanthe of Blue Bidath
Gellera of Blue Virtrath
Korra of Blue Raavath
Kyoshi of Blue Rugrunth
Miryem of Blue Riwenth
Thor of Blue Hinokath
Sam'in of Blue Salineath
Adora of Green Meilith
Elyron of Green Elyrosk
Kiriani of Green Tabesleuth
Wingsecond L'ir of Green Byth
Quintar of Green Task
S'atyl of Green Nineveth
Makoto of White Usakinth
M'ieln of White Hroth
Rhaenys of White Cosmiath
Wingleader Tyrion of White Voluntauth
Actaeon
Mithras
High Reaches
Cynthia of Gold Eliask
Ce'na of Bronze Noath
Hela of Bronze Helsk and Brown Hesk
Azul of Brown Claarisath
Di'a of Brown Kasshuth
Dobby of Brown Kersuth
I'lir of Brown Belliorath
Ingrid of Brown Delinarth
Wingleader Myalla of Brown Enarth
Th'ou of Brown Pavith
Wingsecond D'ark of Garnet Masreith
Squadsecond Tomas of Garnet Tomask and White Tsk
Weyrling Master Camilla of Blue Kamuith
Edda of Blue Katakurth
Jace of Blue Gallath
Jae of Blue Zappath
Sayla of Blue Sacroth
Sha'm of Blue Taarisoth
Tamara of Blue Requeth
Ya'ra of Blue Dymrith
Yvaen of Blue Bolduth
Zhuli of Blue Zhusk and Blue Lisk
Kanon of Green Kibeth
Kip of Green Amizuth
Numann of Green Rannath
Raine of Green Spriggth
Wilred of Green Lresk and Blue Wilrsk
Sokka of Green Wintrath
T'ir of Green Blysith
Riku of White Taissath
Aragon
Pyeta
Semaca Weyr
Arena of Void Oscamith
Alayna of Gold Wyzeth
Al'bus of Bronze Matanuth
Noor of Bronze Nuunieth
Schneizel of Bronze Damocleth
Hermione of Brown Echoneth
K'zon of Brown Rurosuth
Sage of Brown Wisketoth
Shuri of Brown Motath
Varda of Brown Magmeth
Ei of Garnet Eisk
Karlach of Garnet Ussk
Ly'nk of Garnet Sakuyath
Maui of Garnet Mausk and Blue Mask
Uruk of Garnet Georsath
Artemis of Blue Phoebuth
Corleon of Blue Corleosk and White Corlesk
D'vir of Blue Cainhurth
Candidatemaster Naxen of Blue Anitoth
N'aya of Blue Ilouth
Point Rigel of Blue Cygneth
Ariel of Green Kshatriyath
Eleanor of Green Elsk
Eli'us of Green Sallith
Mi'wa of Green Ephiith
Natsuno of Green Minamith
L'ani of Green Haillenarth
Rhea of Green Rheask
Captain Vella of Green Vellask and Magma Vesk
V'rell of Green Peridoth
Wyatt of Green Emilith
Laera of White Tarth
Kowal of White Kowalsk
Pasca of White Judgmeth
R'tan of White Mazath
Steward Molly
Athan
Tarva
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