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[WIP] Shira of Brown Biscoth [RFR]

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[WIP] Shira of Brown Biscoth [RFR]

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"If you're helping someone and expecting something in return, you're doing business not kindness."

BASICS

NAME: Shira
GENDER: Female
PRONOUNS: She/her/hers
ORIENTATION: Bi-Curious
BIRTHDATE: Born middle fall of 2747
AGE: 26 as of early winter of 2773
LOCATION: Semaca Weyr

OCCUPATION: Brown Rider, Healer Apprenitce
WING: Healer


APPEARANCE
EYES: Green
HAIR: Red Long
HEIGHT AND BUILD: 5/9 thin and slender build
PLAY-BY: Shiryuki from Snow White with the Red Hair
FULL APPEARANCE: Shira is an average height slender built lovely female. She has long red hair she usually keeps tied back in a loose ponytail-like fashion. Her skin is paler in comparison to most others. Her cheeks usually always have a rosy tint to them from all the bustling around and healing duties. You'll almost always find her in her usual healer clothes.

PERSONALITY
PERSONALITY: Shira is very kind. She is also empathetic. She loves to help people which is why she became a healer. She often quite busy, whether it is with her duties as a healer. Or tending to her garden. She often a no-nonsense kind of person especially when it comes to healing duties. She can also be laid back like her bonded. Although the latter rarely happens. It usually takes a lot of coaxing from her Biscoth.

Shira is also quite adaptable as she has proven, since moving from Igen. Igen having at one time been the only thing she had ever known. She is contstantly alert. Being a healer you usually have to be. Whether "on duty" or not. She is also quite optimistic besides the fact of her being a healer. More than once a person she was caring for with a major injury she always had an optimistic view about it to help the patient.

Shira is also secluded, and tucked-away. Going through her depressed time of the many failed impressions she became almost like a hermit. She hasn't really cared if she ever got a friend or made one. That is not until Biscoth came along and became her forever friend and helped to turn her around.

HISTORY
FAMILY: Mother: Alive [Cook in Igen]; Father: Alive [Healer in Igen].
SIGNIFICANT OTHER: Open
BIRTHPLACE: Igen
HISTORY: Shira grew up happily within the walls of her family. Her mother was a cook. She made exquisite dishes. Her father was a healer. Even when she was young she loved helping others. She wanted to be like her father. A healer. She loved her home in Igen.

When Shira turned 15 and was able to be a candidate to possibly impress she didn't think much of it. Therefore, when she appeared on the sands, it was to aid her mentor with the healing in case something went wrong. When Shira turned 16 she felt as though something was missing within her life. That is when she became a candidate and began to attend the touching of the eggs and the sands when it was hatching time.

Although a few more years passed with no luck and she grew more and more discouraged. She spiraled downwards and turned to wine to hide her depression. She would often show up to her candidacy lessons hungover. She barely took time to look after herself first. If she wasn't doing her candidacy lessons, or her craft lesson in the few candlemarks she had free. She found herself with drink in hand wallowing in her own thoughts.

She became quite distant and secluded from her fellow candidates, even her mentor. Each day became like a cd on repeat. She would get up, fullfill her candidacy duties, work on her craft, go home, sleep repeat.

Finally the fall she was gonna turn 20 the unthinkable happened. Biscoth impressed with her. To be quite frank Shira had her hands full. More than she thought possible. The moment it happened she couldn't believe it. The first words she had heard her beloved brown say was. "Sorry I'm late. But you can't rush perfection." At first she hadn't understood, as from the start it was hard to take Biscoth seriously.

Biscoth hated that she drank so much, especially because it made his bonded feel even worse. Biscoth didn't know much about it but knew his bonded would never truly be happy as long as she kept drinking the stuff as heavily as she was. The tugging and ripping of Shiras garments did little to sway her habits at first. She would often get mad because her clothes were torn and she would have to patch them.

She would never actually hurt Biscoth in any way. She would just get overly irritated and frustrated half the time mumbling nonsense about her garments. As the months dragged on and a year went by Biscoth resorted to new methods. He would use his tail to knock the drinks off the table which in turn would spill everywhere. He would make it into some sort of game even though he was being totally serious.

Shira would ask him constantly why he did it, all he would simply reply was "It's fun." This time it was Biscoths turn to get angry. His bonded hadn't taken any of the hints or feelings through the link. The wine was discombobulating it all. Making his bonded numb. Finally one day he whipped her cup off the table turning his gaze to her his eyes swirling red with anger. "Enough! I do not like this! I do not like how it makes you feel! It is starting to affect your work! Even our classes! I have tried to get you to understand without it coming to this. No More!"

At first Shira was stunned at the outrage from her carefree bonded. Then she was pissed that yet again her drink was thrown onto the ground. Sitting there wallowing she came to the realization. What was there to wallow about anymore. Why was she still wallowing? There was no need to. She had her beloved bonded who she had severely upset, she had her craft, she had her candidate lessons. Realizing Biscoth was right she heaved a sigh.

She told Biscoth everything she had realized and gave him a huge hug the next day. With Biscoths help Shira turned to her wine less and less. It was also in a way thanks to Biscoth she found she loved to garden. Once they graduated Shira looked towards the wine less and less. Wanting to have a fresh start she told her parents and her healer mentor that they were going to Semaca. With heartfelt goodbyes Biscoth and Shira headed towards their new home for new beginnings.

It has been 6 and a half years since transferring. Upon reaching Semaca she found the place beautiful. It took a little while for her to find another mentor, but she did it. With Biscoths help she has quit her excessive wine habits. Once they were within their weyr she took to gardening so to speak. She would tend to potted plants, having various ones. She found it therapeutic and whether Biscoth admitted it or not he enjoyed the scents that it brought into the weyr. Among the potted plants she would have some herbs as well.

If it wasn't for her beloved Biscoth. Shira most definitely would not be where she is at now. Still apprenticing as a healer, having a beautiful garden, and her beloved Biscoth still by her side.
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BROWN BISCOTH
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BASICS

NAME: Biscoth
BIRTHDATE Fall 2765
AGE: 8 as of 2773

APPEARANCE
LENGTH: 38ft
HEIGHT: 9.5ft
WINGSPAN: 60ft
COLOR: Brown
HEX CODE:#876E43
FULL APPEARANCE:
Biscoth is a rather short brown with slightly larger wings in comparison to his body. He has a dull brown body with several darker specks going down his tail. The top of his head to his snout has a light tan, almost lace-like pattern that goes down his neck and tail. Along with this, he almost appears as if he has gloves and boots on. There is a lacy pattern on the front of his front claws with a dark brown color. On his hind legs, they are the same dark brown color with a band of light tan going across his knees. The inside of his wings are dark brown with several light tan specks that become more and more concentrated towards the end of his wings.

PERSONALITY
PERSONALITY:
Biscoth is a hard dragon to take seriously. He often has a sing-song tone when speaking to other dragons and is considerably vain. He only wants to wear the finest gear and only to have the best oils used on him. He is a dragon who cares a lot about how he appears, but not how he presents himself. He often likes to tease others and, when annoyed, tends to be overly sarcastic.

He can be seen a bit as lazy at times. He believes his rider should relax and take things as they come. The only time he ever acts serious is during Threadfall. Otherwise, he would rather be basking in the sunlight instead of doing chores or training. He wants his rider to be as relaxed as he is and often tries to coax them into laying down beside him as he relaxes.

[Biscoth was created by Shelb as a Secret Santath gift]
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-Healers and other crafters need their rank specified. In Shira's case, she'd still be an apprentice, since she Impressed before walking the tables. Please specify that she's an apprentice under her occupation.

-Personalities need to be a minimum of 200 words.

-Shira needs a flaw, with a flaw being defined as something that makes her either less competent or less good.

-TPA does not allow mysterious pasts. Parents must always be specified. In this case, as she does not remember them anyway and it seems to have made little impact on her life, please just make her adoptive parents her birth parents.

-Shira's parents' deaths are not mentioned in her history and she is quite young for both of her parents to have passed, especially as neither of them is a rider or handler who could have had a threadfall accident. Staff recommends you just leave them alive but if you want her to have lost one, it needs to be discussed in her history.

-Children are not eligible for candidacy until they turn 15. If Shira Impressed at 18, and didn't start standing for a few turns after she turned 15, she would not have been standing very long at all.

-Candidacy is a full time and demanding lifestyle. Shira wouldn't have been able to throw herself into her craft, as she'd have had candidate duties and lessons. Candidates have only a few candlemarks a day set aside for crafting. There is more to being a candidate than attending clutches and hatchings! You can see what a candidate's daily schedule would look like here.

-All Fort clutches after 2760 hatched onscreen. Fort also has had a lot of plot you don't mention in Shira's history. Please move her to Ista, Igen or Telgar.

-"If it wasn't for her Biscoth Shira probably wouldn't be around."

I am confused by this. What would have happened to Shira without Biscoth?

-Shira has been a rider for 8 turns now. What has she been up to all this time?

-Why did Shira decide to transfer to Semaca? How long has she been there and how has she found her new home?
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Quinn of Bronze-White Louicyth
Wingleader S'bor of Bronze Yugoth
Allag of Brown Babyloth
Daphne of Brown Ogatath
ACM Estelle of Brown Jaehaeryth
Faralyn of Brown Grooth
Gymlin of Brown Glacendath
Ieyasu of Brown Ieyask
P'pin of Brown Palath
T'rin of Brown Celeth
Cole of Garnet Colsk and Blue Colodeosk
G'er of Garnet Neozeoth
Lily of Garnet Eridieth
N'ell of Garnet Pamith
Relli of Garnet Rellivask and Blue Relsk
Augury of Blue Velveth
Chrysanthe of Blue Bidath
Gellera of Blue Virtrath
Korra of Blue Raavath
Kyoshi of Blue Rugrunth
Miryem of Blue Riwenth
Thor of Blue Hinokath
Sam'in of Blue Salineath
Adora of Green Meilith
Elyron of Green Elyrosk
Kiriani of Green Tabesleuth
Wingsecond L'ir of Green Byth
Quintar of Green Task
S'atyl of Green Nineveth
Makoto of White Usakinth
M'ieln of White Hroth
Rhaenys of White Cosmiath
Wingleader Tyrion of White Voluntauth
Actaeon
Mithras
High Reaches
Cynthia of Gold Eliask
Ce'na of Bronze Noath
Hela of Bronze Helsk and Brown Hesk
Azul of Brown Claarisath
Di'a of Brown Kasshuth
Dobby of Brown Kersuth
I'lir of Brown Belliorath
Ingrid of Brown Delinarth
Wingleader Myalla of Brown Enarth
Th'ou of Brown Pavith
Wingsecond D'ark of Garnet Masreith
Squadsecond Tomas of Garnet Tomask and White Tsk
Weyrling Master Camilla of Blue Kamuith
Edda of Blue Katakurth
Jace of Blue Gallath
Jae of Blue Zappath
Sayla of Blue Sacroth
Sha'm of Blue Taarisoth
Tamara of Blue Requeth
Ya'ra of Blue Dymrith
Yvaen of Blue Bolduth
Zhuli of Blue Zhusk and Blue Lisk
Kanon of Green Kibeth
Kip of Green Amizuth
Numann of Green Rannath
Raine of Green Spriggth
Wilred of Green Lresk and Blue Wilrsk
Sokka of Green Wintrath
T'ir of Green Blysith
Riku of White Taissath
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Semaca Weyr
Arena of Void Oscamith
Alayna of Gold Wyzeth
Al'bus of Bronze Matanuth
Noor of Bronze Nuunieth
Schneizel of Bronze Damocleth
Hermione of Brown Echoneth
K'zon of Brown Rurosuth
Sage of Brown Wisketoth
Shuri of Brown Motath
Varda of Brown Magmeth
Ei of Garnet Eisk
Karlach of Garnet Ussk
Ly'nk of Garnet Sakuyath
Maui of Garnet Mausk and Blue Mask
Uruk of Garnet Georsath
Artemis of Blue Phoebuth
Corleon of Blue Corleosk and White Corlesk
D'vir of Blue Cainhurth
Candidatemaster Naxen of Blue Anitoth
N'aya of Blue Ilouth
Point Rigel of Blue Cygneth
Ariel of Green Kshatriyath
Eleanor of Green Elsk
Eli'us of Green Sallith
Mi'wa of Green Ephiith
Natsuno of Green Minamith
L'ani of Green Haillenarth
Rhea of Green Rheask
Captain Vella of Green Vellask and Magma Vesk
V'rell of Green Peridoth
Wyatt of Green Emilith
Laera of White Tarth
Kowal of White Kowalsk
Pasca of White Judgmeth
R'tan of White Mazath
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-Shira still needs a flaw. What about her would cause her to fail at something important? Or why would she doing something morally wrong?

-If Shira was too dependent on alcohol to be able to function, she would not have been allowed to remain a candidate or an apprentice healer. While we do have some characters with problems with alcohol, those characters are generally graduated wherhandlers or riders who are much harder to remove from their position. An alcoholic candidate regularly coming to lessons hungover would not have been allowed to stand.

-I'll also point out again that Shira Impressed at 18 and started standing at 16. Her reaction to this seems overblown, as she Impressed quite quickly based on the dates you've given. She probably only stood for 4 or 5 clutches at most, including garnet clutches.

-You mention her Impressing at 20 later on, but this doesn't match Shira and Biscoth's birth dates. Even if she Impressed at 20, that is still only 4 years of candidate, which is really not so much she should fall into a deep depression over not Impressing.

-Weyrlings are not allowed to drink alcohol.

-Healers do not have specific mentors at the weyr. Apprentices would be trained by several different journeymen and masters, with different skillsets. I assume this is what you mean by your repeated references to Shira's mentor.
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Essa of Bronze Gectusith
Hunter of Bronze Yndesk
Quinn of Bronze-White Louicyth
Wingleader S'bor of Bronze Yugoth
Allag of Brown Babyloth
Daphne of Brown Ogatath
ACM Estelle of Brown Jaehaeryth
Faralyn of Brown Grooth
Gymlin of Brown Glacendath
Ieyasu of Brown Ieyask
P'pin of Brown Palath
T'rin of Brown Celeth
Cole of Garnet Colsk and Blue Colodeosk
G'er of Garnet Neozeoth
Lily of Garnet Eridieth
N'ell of Garnet Pamith
Relli of Garnet Rellivask and Blue Relsk
Augury of Blue Velveth
Chrysanthe of Blue Bidath
Gellera of Blue Virtrath
Korra of Blue Raavath
Kyoshi of Blue Rugrunth
Miryem of Blue Riwenth
Thor of Blue Hinokath
Sam'in of Blue Salineath
Adora of Green Meilith
Elyron of Green Elyrosk
Kiriani of Green Tabesleuth
Wingsecond L'ir of Green Byth
Quintar of Green Task
S'atyl of Green Nineveth
Makoto of White Usakinth
M'ieln of White Hroth
Rhaenys of White Cosmiath
Wingleader Tyrion of White Voluntauth
Actaeon
Mithras
High Reaches
Cynthia of Gold Eliask
Ce'na of Bronze Noath
Hela of Bronze Helsk and Brown Hesk
Azul of Brown Claarisath
Di'a of Brown Kasshuth
Dobby of Brown Kersuth
I'lir of Brown Belliorath
Ingrid of Brown Delinarth
Wingleader Myalla of Brown Enarth
Th'ou of Brown Pavith
Wingsecond D'ark of Garnet Masreith
Squadsecond Tomas of Garnet Tomask and White Tsk
Weyrling Master Camilla of Blue Kamuith
Edda of Blue Katakurth
Jace of Blue Gallath
Jae of Blue Zappath
Sayla of Blue Sacroth
Sha'm of Blue Taarisoth
Tamara of Blue Requeth
Ya'ra of Blue Dymrith
Yvaen of Blue Bolduth
Zhuli of Blue Zhusk and Blue Lisk
Kanon of Green Kibeth
Kip of Green Amizuth
Numann of Green Rannath
Raine of Green Spriggth
Wilred of Green Lresk and Blue Wilrsk
Sokka of Green Wintrath
T'ir of Green Blysith
Riku of White Taissath
Aragon
Pyeta
Semaca Weyr
Arena of Void Oscamith
Alayna of Gold Wyzeth
Al'bus of Bronze Matanuth
Noor of Bronze Nuunieth
Schneizel of Bronze Damocleth
Hermione of Brown Echoneth
K'zon of Brown Rurosuth
Sage of Brown Wisketoth
Shuri of Brown Motath
Varda of Brown Magmeth
Ei of Garnet Eisk
Karlach of Garnet Ussk
Ly'nk of Garnet Sakuyath
Maui of Garnet Mausk and Blue Mask
Uruk of Garnet Georsath
Artemis of Blue Phoebuth
Corleon of Blue Corleosk and White Corlesk
D'vir of Blue Cainhurth
Candidatemaster Naxen of Blue Anitoth
N'aya of Blue Ilouth
Point Rigel of Blue Cygneth
Ariel of Green Kshatriyath
Eleanor of Green Elsk
Eli'us of Green Sallith
Mi'wa of Green Ephiith
Natsuno of Green Minamith
L'ani of Green Haillenarth
Rhea of Green Rheask
Captain Vella of Green Vellask and Magma Vesk
V'rell of Green Peridoth
Wyatt of Green Emilith
Laera of White Tarth
Kowal of White Kowalsk
Pasca of White Judgmeth
R'tan of White Mazath
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