-"She cannot stand to be in crowded, closed-in locations and will linger near an egress to ease her fear - she has a preference for meetings or gatherings to be held outdoors, weather permitting, and will often push for such."
Kiba would not be able to move meetings or gatherings outdoors. Most healing is done inside, in the infirmary. As a healer, she would need to be able to handle that sometimes crowded environment without being distracted by it, as healers do delicate work. If being indoors is a constant mental load, she should consider farmcrafting focused on healing herbs or being a beastcrafter instead, which would allow her to work primarily outdoors.
-"She is soft-spoken and gentle, eagerly helping those who are having troubles grasping certain things - and having the patience to cope with their failings and work them through it. Her bedside manners help earn the confidence of her patients."
You cannot determine how other people, including Kiba's patients, will react to her, as they may be other PCs.
-"Because Kiba is so diligent to excel at the healing arts, she often stays awake late in the night to study techniques and freshen up on 'symptoms of this' and 'remedies for that'. The lines between Healer life and actual, well, life blur for her - so much so that the mending of her clothes is done in the style of medical suturing. She fixates a little too much on 'what if' scenarios (a plague? a bloodborne disease? what if we run out of this herb before the next growing season?). This 'obsession' is a safety blanket. Throwing mental exercises at her brain and looking for possible solutions has become one of her coping mechanisms with the loss of her family and Hold."
Kiba is a very junior apprentice, who was a woman raised in weaverhall long before she started her healer training. At this point, she would be assisting in minor treatments, preparing bandages, attending basic lessons, etc. She would not have the knowledge or the skills to immerse herself this far in healing. Staff would also like to see her not be entirely defined by what she's been through- It can have an effect on her without being everything she is in every aspect of her life. People are more than their traumas.
Mori and
Ke'ro are good examples of how you can strike the balance of letting a character's traumas impact them without overwhelming the rest of what makes them interesting.
-"But Kiba? She was undecided, and tended to meander between the Halls with curiosity about all but dedication to none. Izunuka and Akamaru had wishes for both of their children to inherit the craft, but with Kiba aging too quickly and fast approaching the age where she would no longer be eligible to walk the tables for any Hall, they were left suggesting other opportunities for her to take on. Nothing seemed to stick. She was wayward - and would remain so, it seemed, for a long time."
As I pointed out in my prior review, Pernese children are not required or expected to become crafters and the halls are too not place she could wander between.
-"The siblings survived. Her family and the other Holders? They were not so lucky. "
Not everyone at High Reaches Hold died. Not even a majority of the hold did. While there were a few casualties, there are a large number of other survivors.
-"The siblings survived. Her family and the other Holders? They were not so lucky. She was thrust into High Reaches Weyr with her brother. Saori was keen to join the ground crew, dedicated to showing his thanks for the dragonriders' efforts to save and shelter those suddenly without a home. For Kiba, this was a walking nightmare. The cold, creeping depths of rocky caverns and lurking shadows reminded her of being buried alive. Almost every seeming moment was spent trapped in a lingering horror. The panic attacks were debilitating. She couldn't sleep. She refused to eat. Shadows circled her eyes. Kiba's dwindling health raised concern from all. It was suggested that she leave the Weyr for some place less confined.
That would mean leaving Saori, her only remaining family. Unwilling to part ways, the white wherhandler suggested they go to Semaca Weyr together - as it was much more out in the open than the claustrophobic halls of High Reaches. But doing so would separate them from the ruins of High Reaches Hold. Parting from the burial grounds of her family was ... harsh. In many ways, Kiba felt she would be turning her back on her family's legacy. They could return to Weavercraft Hall, maybe? Rebuild? No, the idea of digging through the muk was like ... gravedigging. Maybe in the future, when she had time to cope. Not now.
She sought aid from the resident Healers. Although mindhealing wasn't something that was specialized, following in their footsteps and learning their ways helped stuff some of her skeletons into a closet. The more she learned, the more useful she felt. The more useful she felt, the less survivor's guilt clung to her mind - and the less fear swallowed her alive. With time, sleeping in the closed Weyr's quarters became manageable. There were good days and bad days, of course, but that would take time and effort to clamber through. Kiba had something to strive for - a goal to become a Healer. Not just any Healer, a Master."
Please tone this down substantially, as staff has asked you to do several times.
-As staff has previously asked, please pick an angle for Kiba. She cannot be both a wherhandler and a Master Healer. It does not make sense for her to wish to be a wher candidate if her goal is to become a masterhealer.